Carnival of Feasts – WeWriWa/8sentence

WeWriWa ThumbHello, all! Welcome back. For those of you new to WeWriWa‘s or just happening upon this post, let me give you a little background. WeWriWa is a blog hop where writers share 8 to 10 sentences of either a work in progress or a finished piece. Comments are encouraged, as is supporting others by visiting their blogs and giving their excerpts a read.

It’s been awhile since I’ve posted a WeWriWa/8sentence. I’ve been a bit busy tinkering away at a couple new short stories. The one featured below was written for the Once Upon Now short story contest hosted by Target on Wattpad. Entries are must be between 4,000 and 9,000 words and contain fairy tale themes or feature classic characters. I chose to use three of my favorite fairy tales as inspiration, Hansel and Gretel published in 1812 by Jacob and Wilhelm Grimm, The Pied Piper of Hamelin by Robert Browning, and Spirited Away by Hayao Miyazaki.


CoF-01Here’s the setup:

After visiting an old-fashioned carnival with his family, seven-year-old Manny gets swallowed up by a specter of the same carnival late the following night. The only witness to the disappearance is his older brother Josh. Knowing no one will believe him if is tells the truth, Josh puts it upon himself to get his little brother back. Gaining important information from an unlikely source, Josh sets out to find the carnival. Hearing the tale-tell organ music from the night before, Josh finds the carnival and gets inside.

On to the excerpt!


Mustering my resolve, I entered the tent and walked to where Manny sat. At the sight of me, the children hushed and stared. The barker who had his back to us turned to see what had caused the loss of his audience. I paid the room no mind and squatted at Manny’s side. He looked at me, his expression blank as if I were a stranger. “Manny?” I said. “It’s me, Josh.”

A small flicker of recognition danced in his eyes, but he remained silent.

“I don’t believe you have a ticket,” said the barker.


Will Josh get himself and Manny out? What about the other children? What does the ghost carnival want with the children in the first place?

I hope you liked this excerpt from Carnival of Feasts. If you would like to read the full story, you can catch it on Wattpad. If you happen to have a Wattpad account, and like the story and would like to see it in print and sold in Target stores, please vote between July 14 through the 21st. Only votes gained during that time will be counted towards the winning stories.

Cynthia Varady

Cynthia Varady

Cynthia Varady is an award-winning freelance writer and co-owner of the book review website, She currently resides in the San Francisco Bay Area with her husband and son. Cynthia has her BA in English Literature from Sonoma State University, and her Masters in Library and Information Science from San Jose State University. Occasionally, Cynthia can be found voicing characters in casual video games, including Stella in the Aveyond series. She is presently working on a young adult fantasy novel.

4 thoughts on “Carnival of Feasts – WeWriWa/8sentence

  • June 12, 2016 at 7:53 am

    Well Josh is a brave guy, which I loved. Cool concept! Enjoyed the excerpt, very spooky.

  • June 12, 2016 at 1:32 pm

    I wonder what they’ve done to the children that Manny doesn’t even recognize his brother.

  • June 12, 2016 at 4:14 pm

    Oh-oh, I don’t see this going well. Spooky. If there’s a clown I’m gone! Great snippet.

  • June 12, 2016 at 10:15 pm

    I always knew there was something creepy about carnivals! Very tense scene, and I want to know where it goes!

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